2015년 5월 18일 월요일

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If you want to save the time in your transportation, you should apply “smarter subway”  to know the shortest route in your commute.  If you want to know where is your departure and arrival station,  you just search the name of station on the top of blank . The next step to use the app is clicking two stations which are departure and arrival . After picking, you just adjust the time when you will be departure. Then, you can see the useful informations such as subway`s departure time, shortest way to commute, arrival time. If you want to know all these information,  just click the three buttons because It is simple and easy app to use.

댓글 4개:

  1. Generally,this paragraph is very consice. But if you add sequence words each surporting sentence, the reader can read this paragraph easily.

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  2. This paragraph is easy for people to searching shortest way. But if you add concise words about the three buttons, people can understand very well.

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  3. I think it is easy to read and it's really usuful App, but please use more complex sentnces.

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  4. Hi, when I didn't know this app I often miss subway`s departure time, but now I can know subway`s departure time!!!!!!!!!

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